Our love should be deeper than a flatscreen

This morning I posted the line “I don’t care that you’re my virtual friend as long as you’re real”
and then a comment  popped  up that it should be in a song.

So I wrote it.

Our love should be deeper than a flatscreen

we always said we didn’t care
that we were virtual friends
as long as we were real
but now we finally see
there is much, much more to feel

our longing skin
ready to be touched
to feel the desire
from deep within

so, we must meet in the end
my virtual friend and
change our virtuality
into a rare reality

our love should be deeper than a flatscreen
there should be no glass between us
our words should not made by hands

we always said we didn’t need
to come much closer
as long we’re together
but now we finally see
our  love is as light as a feather

so it could be
taken by the wind
and fly  away
too easily

so, we must  meet in the end
my virtual friend and
change our virtuality
into a rare reality

our love should be deeper than a flatscreen
there should be no glass between us
our words should not made by hands

so, we must  meet in the end
my virtual friend and
change our virtuality
into a rare reality

If you are musician and you want to use it please contact me.
©Jan Marius All rights reserved 2011

10 responses

  1. Debbie Couillard

    Thats beautiful.Id love to hear it to music.You did a great job with words in such a short time.Well done!!

    January 29, 2011 at 4:35 pm

  2. Lenee

    Beautifully penned, Jan,
    would love to hear you sing it!!
    Have a great weekend.
    Sending you love with hugs!

    January 29, 2011 at 4:57 pm

  3. GABY

    .
    WOW !!!…
    BEAUTIFUL WORDS…YEAH…
    AND I ADMIRE YOU FOR TO MAKE IT
    THANK YOU FOR SHARING
    .

    January 29, 2011 at 7:21 pm

    • Deenie Ickringill

      Loved this. Well done Jan and in such a short time. I am impressed! You truly have an amazing talent as a writer and a photographer.

      January 30, 2011 at 12:18 am

  4. Ahhhh now Jan, you know I think you are a fantastically creative guy!, to write this in such a short time shows exactly how true that is.

    Now all you have to do is set it to music and post it so I can here your wonderful voice sing loud and clear.

    Your words ring out with warmth and soul

    As always Jan, dont stop doing what you do best, create my beautiful friend, create! Xx

    January 30, 2011 at 1:05 am

  5. Miella D

    The Lyric is lovely Jan! I will send You a note about it on FB, have a great Thursday!

    Miella

    February 3, 2011 at 12:48 pm

  6. This is beautiful as it is lyrical. Would love to hear it if you set to Music.

    February 11, 2011 at 2:10 am

  7. You have written a masterpeice of poetry, yes, you could put music to it and make it into a song .Loved your pure vision and the anticipation in your very beautiful lines .Rosie.

    February 11, 2011 at 11:05 pm

  8. “our love should be deeper than a flatscreen
    there should be no glass between us
    our words should not made by hands

    so, we must meet in the end
    my virtual friend and
    change our virtuality
    into a rare reality”

    This is superb!! Human connection!!❤❤
    The beginning of real love.

    April 22, 2011 at 8:40 pm

  9. Oh gosh….hahhhaaaa
    Lovely very romantic Marius🙂
    I agree with creativesparkle, you should sing it!!!

    Smiles & light

    November 5, 2011 at 11:17 pm

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